Freestyle Writing

WALT: Freestyle writing about an image .

Today after lunch time our Teacher asked us to write a story about a picture This is what i Wrote. Tell me what you think in the comments below.

The  Wind Rush thought her hair as she descended the mountain at great speed for much children this  would be an exhilarating even terrifying experience but for Lucy it was just an ordinary journey to School.  

She ran off the zipline and she landed  on the ground and she got up and started to walk  and she was walking past lots of trees that's so tall and long and she took  out her drink bottle and she drinked it and she putted the drink bottle back in her bag and she took out the food and  she eat some food and she saw her school and.

She dropped her food because her school  was full of candy and lots of candy and the roof was made out of m&ms and she   ran fast as she could to catch up to the candy school and she opened the door and the door was made out of gingerbread  with chocolate and M&Ms

The lockers were made out of M&Ms and  then she saw lots of girls walking with friends and  then she ran to the locker and she eat all of the candy  in the school and she had to relax and she got up and she got her bag and she got out the rope and she aimed at the long tree  and she was going so fast and then she was going so fast as a flying bird and.

She got off the rope and she took off the hook that was on the tree and she put the hook back in her bag and then she zipped  her bag and then she took the bag and she put it on her back and she started to walked on the grass and when she came on the road and she walked on the sidewalk and then  she saw her family's and friends and they were standing outside of their houses and then she ran to her family and friends and her mum said did you have fun at your new school and Lucy said it was a great day at my new school because I eat  my whole school because it was made out of chocolate and gingerbread too and it was yum and that is the end of my story .